I was at school and when it was brain food time I got out my apple. I could not believe the smell. I took a big bite and before I could say, “ OMG, “ I ran to the boys toilet and spat the apple out. Before I went back to class I had a good hard look at my apple. It was rotten, soft, brown and it had a worm farm in it. It smelt like a mixture of food rubbish and vomit.
I quickly threw it in the bin.
After school I told my mum that my apple was rotten. I was feeling quite annoyed that I missed out on my fruit break just because mum had not checked the quality of fruit in my lunch box.
Hi Dylan, yuk!! You describe the rotten apple very well and I like your choice of interesting adjectives like 'rotten, soft, brown'. I also think you have used your punctuation really well. Next time, double check that you have opened and closed your speech marks properly (for example "OMG"). Well done!
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